Friday, June 17, 2011

Original Shayari :)

Yeah,so I keep bragging about my poetic prowess...turns out I am not a good poet:) That last fan mail was a practical joke pulled by a good friend!! Silly silly me :) Sometimes, such silly events have an uncanny knack of bringing life back into perspective:)....So I humbly concede defeat.

These are a few non-english verses I had composed when such a mood gripped me:)

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Tujhe apna samajhkar apne dil mein di thi panaah,
Kaisi teri mohabbat thi, jisne kar di fanaah,
Ab dil mein baar baar ye sawaal uthtaa hai,
Saza us bhool ki mili,ya phir pyaar karna tha gunaah?
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Jinhone jeene mein ummeed chod di,
woh maut se pehle hi mar gaye,
na khud jiya,na kisi ka kuch kar gaye,
Mayusi agar chaane lage,hone lage dil pe haavi,
Bas yeh yaad kar lena ki sirf tujhme basti hai,
tumhare kismat ki chaabi

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Woh bhi kaisi zindagi hai,jo maut ke darr mein jiye,
Ab tak ka toh theek tha,socho aage ke liye,
Dil mein agar vishwaas ho,aur iraada nek,
apni har iccha hogi poori, chahe ek ho ya anek!

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Abhi ranbhumi mein utre nahin,
ki bhaagne ko ho taiyyar,
Usne bhi kya zindagi ji,
ji na jung lada, na pyaar

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Bahut ho gayi bhaaga daudi,ab mujhko jeena hai,
Poore kayaaat se lad jaayen,aise taana seena hai!
Waise bhi bhaag kar kya mila? - Gum aur tanhaai,
Ab nayi umang aur naya josh lekar hoon laut aayi.

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Have lost touch with hindi/urdu/farsi compostions:)

Thursday, June 2, 2011

Tips to write a poem

Been at home for 10 days due to a back problem...strictly advised to stay away from the system for now:)But this post was worth all the effort!

Well,the title must sound grand.So I'd like to give the disclaimer beforehand - I am not an expert!But the following tips work,95% of the occasions.The remaining 5% I'll attribute to moments of misjudgement:) And why 95%? Well,coz I got my first fan mail!!(Ok,maybe not "fan mail",but appreciation at least!!)So I must be doing something right!!Right?

And since I am an obnoxious show off(And proud of it too:P), I am going to share the mail,and my reply.(Applause!!;))

On Mon, May 30, 2011 at 1:22 PM, Saurabh Suman wrote:
Hi Renju,
I might be stranger to you but I've browsed your blog. and i was really impressed by the way you write. I also love the poetry but its not actually my cup of tea, but still i want to put my ideas in to the poems which the world should appreciate. Here is one of my poem(Can you pls just go through it and edit it wherever necessary):
You looked so happy with the path you had chosen
Getting everything in your life..money, fame everything
you have a Mercedes standing in your great bungalow.
what else you need? you look so happy
But my dear friend, you're making your life dark
Today you're busy with your work,
You don't have time for your friends
Coz running behind the money as it's in trend
Have you forgotten the days which were spent together
the days when we sat together, laughed together,
where are those days?
Look inside you, you think you're happy
no my dear friend
ask yourself do you have even a shoulder to cry
is there anyone who is with you
you don't have time for anyone else..except money
money isn't life,look outside
don't be so selfish, this time won't come back
there won't be anyone even if you will be sad
life is so beautiful, take a step, and give your time
to your family.. to your friends,
who were always with you, even when the world detest
That would be really nice of you. Also, i don't know how to end my poem
Thanks,
Suman Saurabh


My reply:

Hi Suman,

I'm flattered that my blog has impressed you so much that you actually trust me to proof-read yours!!Consider me obnoxious,but I'll be adding this as a part of my blog:)

I am no expert.I just tend to write whatever catches my fancy or weighs on my mind at a given moment.If I happen to have a pen in my hand at that predestined moment,I end up composing it!I am sure anyone else can do the same,so there is no need to undermine yourself.

Anyway,I went through your poem.I didn't edit it because, as an artist,I know how much of effort and creativity goes into every piece of art -be it a poem,painting or a sculpture.So I wouldn't want to tarnish what is rightfully yours.

However,I can surely make a few suggestions.However,it is up to you,whether to incorporate it or not.

1.You do have a poetic sense,but the rhyming could make it more lyrical.Lyrics are not essential,but then,it would add a musical quality to your poems.You have rhymed it at certain places and ignored it at others.So,somewhere,the lyrical continuity is missing.Well,it's my personal opinion.

But please don't go writing things like -
The cat sat on a mat,
It wore a pretty hat!
(That's stupid)...Write about things that really concern you.Write from your heart.Doesn't matter if there are no rhyming words,the end result is bound to be beautiful.

2.This may sound a bit harsh.But I think you should work on your grammar.Throughout the poem,the tense of the poem is not clear-Past,present or future.It looks like you are comparing the past with the present and are warning about the future consequences,but the sequencing could be better.Presently,the poem goes back and forth.It could confuse your reader.

3.The ending is the most critical part of any poem.For it reflects what you are actually trying to convey through a poem.I don't see anything wrong with the present ending of your poem.

However,for future reference,you can end your poems in several ways. 2 of my favourite endings are when -

a)You make the decision for your readers to follow - These kind of endings are in poems with a strong theme.Topics that you feel strongly about.And topics that you have an opinion on.And the way you end it should be such,that the predominant thoughts among your readers,after going through the poem,should be in favour of your opinion.Or totally against!Never let it be neutral,for a poem stems from emotions.And hence should evoke the reader's emotions.

b)You let your readers take their own decision - These are usually attributed to poems with a deep meaning.Wherein,the answers don't lie on the surface of the issue,and require some sort of soul - searching.On such occasions,it is best for the reader to decide himself/herself.On these occasions,you leave the reader with a question in their mind,prodding them to look for the answers,be it outside,or within themselves.

Well,these are all the words of wisdom I could add from personal style and experience.I hope you'll find it useful.

Keep writing,and make sure you enjoy it while you do.If you enjoy it,I guarantee your readers surely will!

All the best!
Regards,
Renju

Wednesday, May 25, 2011

It's an open secret...

There's nothing new about corruption,
What's sad is,it's now an established institution!
If all is fair in love and war,
then what prevailed,is this superstar..
I promise,this is no satire,
Just trying to gauge the vastness,of this empire.

Your boss is an ace skunk,
But you call him a charmer;
Your customer could die of frostbite,
But you promise it'll get warmer.
Don't think of them as humans,they're just resources.
To hell with karma and other cosmic forces!

You don't need an exemplary qualification,
Heck!You don't even need education!
If you just master,the trade and it's tricks,
Doesn't matter, how much your conscience pricks.
An added advantage would be a poker face,
and whenever required,some charm and grace

Honesty and sincerity, are now old fashion;
Integrity died a slow death,sans passion.
If work is worship,then the boss must be god,
But doesn't this supernatural being,strike you as odd?
Millions of contacts,no familial ties,
Retrospect a bit,and voila! A web of lies!

More money than can be spent,
no sense of consequence,or any moral bent,
And if caught,instead of hanging heads in shame,
Proudly enter,the infamous' hall of fame;
While the ever rotting downtrodden,give a wry smile,
Ask,"Hasn't this circus been on for a while?"




Thursday, May 12, 2011

An original,not a version

I am gonna keep the faith
I am not running away
For I know it's never late
To make ityour day
I used to think I was small
But now I know my worth
I know this is not all
Mine wasn't an insignificant birth
I am meant to go far
yesterday,today and tommorow
For I am a bright,shining star,
Wont waste my life,wallowing in sorrow
Its time to dry out my tears
And to face all my fears
For I am a special person
An original,not a version

Wednesday, May 11, 2011

Teach a Child Honesty - wikiHow

Teach a Child Honesty - wikiHow
"Honesty is a dead virtue! All human beings are sinners!"Well,not necessarily.I believe all human beings are innately good.How else would you explain love or sacrifice?Too high sounding?
Well,sample this.How do you feel after you perform a good deed?Something as simple as cleaning your room to slightly bigger tasks,like,volunteering for charity work.Lighter?Happier?Why is a smile contagious?
As human beings,we like to see the good things in the world.It is constant cautioning about the bad elements and negative conditioning from the more "experienced" that make us suspicious and bitter adults.
Children aren't prone to cynicism.They believe in Santa Claus and Tooth fairies.Even when their belief system/fantasy is broken at a later stage in life,they cherish the good old memories associated with it.
How often we wish if we could get back those simpler times.Times that gave us hope of good people in the world.Children are the best vehicles for propogating the change we want to see in the world.

Steps

  1. Teach them virtue of honesty by narrating short stories about superheroes and characters who rose to the occasion without compromising on values and defeated the bad people.Childhood memories leave indelible impressions on the subconcious mind.
  • Cater to their curiosity and encourage their inquisitiveness by answering their questions as honestly as possible. Sure,sometimes, things might get embarrassing,based on the level of the child's curiosity.But teach them tact,not dishonesty.
  • It is a common fact,that home is the first educational centre for a child.And children learn to lie by imitating their parents.Avoid this as much as possible,unless,it is in their interest,and not yours.
  • When a child confesses to some mischief or wrong doing,do not punish him/her.Instead appreciate his/her honesty and let him/her off with a stern warning.
  • If punishment is unavoidable,then make it extremely clear that while his/her honesty was appreciated,the deed is what deserves the punishment.Never send the signal that muddles up their notion that "being honest will lead to punishment,so why bother?"
  • In today's world of cut throat competition,being truthful might not always be practical.And sometimes,it can be downright suicidal.BUt teach your child,that while fibbing is bad,to lie to protect someone's life,or perhaps to protect someone from hurt feelings , is equally necessary.
  • Ancient Indian mythology says,"A lie told to protect someone,if far better than a 100 truths that will destroy him/her"
  • If your child has got the right message, he/she will grow up to be a wonderful human being,with empathy and compassion.And most of all,a genuine concern for every living and non-living thing that exists.
  • Article provided by wikiHow, a wiki how-to manual. Please edit this article and find author credits at the original wikiHow article on How to Teach a Child Honesty. All content on wikiHow can be shared under a Creative Commons license.

    Tuesday, May 10, 2011

    From the heart again...

    You know,my last two posts,are simply garbage!!Well,I am my own worst critic, and ,presently ,I was being polite about my own piece of work.It's a very simple truth.I was trying to write about things that I seriously don't care about.Things that are not close to my heart.And I can see,the effort,at showing fake concern,quite frankly bombed!:)

    I am an IAS aspirant.So,here I was,trying to be all dignified and show concern about the matters that bog the world.Now I realize,dignity is not as important as integrity.With integrity,dignity follows,naturally.

    It's just that,I tried to show concern about things that don't really affect me at a grassroot level.It's very simple.One can only show concern about those things that affect them. Concern is an emotion.Not a diplomatic word.It brings in the concept of morality and care,empathy and sympathy.And when one acts dignified(for dignity is not a natural state,it is a practised art,just like deception),one is basically masquerading their actual feelings and emotions.

    Try expecting dignity from a beggar.You might come across a rare one with steely eyes,filled with intensity.You say,"My God!! What attitude!Can you imagine,he's just a beggar!!"Your reaction is always emotional.And you expect to see misery in the beggar.But if you threw money at the beggar's face,and then he places you with an intense look,registering your insult,it does unnerve you.

    He just exercised his integrity.He's not a destitute by choice,but your rudeness was.And you are equally aware of the fact.And believe it or not,it makes you feel really good about yourself. When you look at someone less fortunate compared to yourself,you automatically feel relief that you are not in that person's position,that you were spared the shame/embarassment/grief/misfortune/whatever. Even Gandhiji's talisman draws in on this fact,whether one realizes it or not. The world is indeed sinister.;)

    Off late,I have been going through the blogs and posts of several IAS/UPSC aspirants.A very interesting one reads"I want to be an honestIAS officer!!Please help!!!".
    Honestly!It's not merely laughable,it's pathetic.The choice of words "want to be honest" shows self-doubts about the candidates character. And the words "An honest IAS officer",shows that the concept of dishonest IAS officer has been institutionalized.Pathetic,how easily it has been accepted.And the worst,"Please help!!" Hahahaaha! Dude!Help yourself!Don't become one! Imagine,as a district collector/District Commisioner/Cabinet Secretary you are faced with a war/drought/flood/tsunami like situation and you reiterate those very words!Frankly demoralizing!

    No.I am not telling all of us are born with these answers.Most of us don't even know how to get through one whole day without causing any major disasters.But,you need to have enough faith in yourself to deal with your turmoils.Yes ,help will follow when needed.But you should be the leader in your situation,and be able to handle it.I don't know who quoted this,"If you don't have faith in yourself,then who will?".But ,it definitely is worth pondering over.

    I believe I am a great writer.I made my foray into social networking sites,a few years back.With due respect to them,on facebook and orkut,I don't find anything that stimulates my mind like when I am left alone with my own thoughts.Does that make me a narcissist?I don't know.Maybe I am obnoxious.But this is who I am. I am not afraid of my identiy.Nor ashamed of it.Whatever I am today,was because of wherever I chose to be at whichever point in my life.I am but the morphosis of my journey,not an end product in itself,for I have not attained my end,yet.

    Poverty ,Hunger ,Domestic ,Wage earners who are underpaid-now these things affect me. Social inequality,practise of caste system,male chauvinism,they bother me.But the real problem that enrages me-freedom- the definition,the boundaries,the whole circus around it.We have constitutions written around it.What we can,and what we can't do.Who determines it? You were born free.The moment they determine your sex,you lost half your freedom,and when you were registered as a citizen,you lose what's remaining too:D

    Saturday, March 19, 2011

    Looked West, Looking East,Headed to Look Upwards

    Theodore Roosevelt had advocated the famed "Big Stick Policy" during his political tenure."Talk softly and carry a big stick,and you'll go far".How many of us actually know that this, is in fact a West African proverb? It is a splendid example of how an interpretation can completely change the destiny of a man,a nation, for centuries to follow.

    The present day USA is but a culmination of migrant population from various colonies. They were sent to US as exile measures or slave trading. Then it wasn't even the USA.It was simply America. The America of the Native Americans,the Aboriginals and Indians(Disambiguated by Columbus's mistake,for he believed he had arrived at the East Indies).

    It is the migrants from various regions and colonies who actually migrated to America over the centuries,developed a collective consciousness and sense of National Identity.The overcame the colonial power excercised by Spain,France ,England and many other countries.On July 4th, 1776 – The Declaration of Independence was adopted by the 13 colony states of the United States Of America, separating it from Great Britain and its king. There has been speculations about whether July 4 was the actual day the Declaration of independence was signed.Indeed,it is thought that although July 4 was the said date,the actual declaration was signed on August 2,1776.

    There is an important geographic fact about July 4th.Earth is said to be at the perihelion,i.e,the farthest point from the sun on this particular day based on its revolutionary orbit.If that is true,light falling on the earth on its perihelion should be limited,considering the distance from the sun.But then,why is July midsummer in the West? Simply because,the seasons are determined by the 23.5 degree tilt of the earth's axis.Hence,the Northern hemisphere,tilting towards the sun,receives maximum sunlight.(The Southern hemisphere experiences winter during this time).Hence,July 4th receives maximum sunlight in the year.

    The Sun is the primordial and powerful source of energy,and hence all life processes on the Earth. A nation that declares its independence on the day with maximum sunlight,harnessing maximum "power"(pun very much intended), is obviously expected to utilize it! I am not an astrologer.I don't even claim to be one.But certain facts stare us in the face,even when we try to deny it.

    The US is unique in the fact that they never follow.When the whole world had right-sight driven cars,the US drives left.They follow the pound system,while the "Standard" says Kilogram.They follow Miles, and we scream "Kilometre".And the fun part,is that they are not different in a "mad-scientist" sort of way.They respect (or so it seems) the ways of other countries. But the message comes very quietly- "When you are on my turf,you follow my rules".It is not loud,but crystal clear(The Big Stick Policy applied and how!).They always chart out a different path,and ensure everyone else toes that line.Infuriating as this is to its allies(no one is openly hostile to the US!),they are forced to respect it,even if grudgingly so.

    The only few occasions where US complacence was shaken was during the dreaded Pearl Harbour episode,or the 9/11 attack on the WTC.But,the US reacted,and how! Somehow,the superpower, showed everyone, who the boss really is(Big Stick Policy again!),equivalent to breaking the bones of the offenders in what could be construed as revenge,sweet revenge

    Like all the planets orbit around the sun,somehow,all the countries in the unipolar world revolved around policy decisions made in the US.Unfortunately,the withering of its only serious rival for a very long time,the USSR,somehow sealed this fact. But like the cosmic truth that even a long day ultimately comes to an end, the focus is slowly shifting to the East.The Chinese making huge technological and economic advents(India is not far behind either).Japan had made its presence felt very long back with the amount of destruction it caused and underwent(Pearl Harbor,Hiroshima,Nagasaki,nuclear attack).

    Japan is a splendid example of resilience in the east.Braving earthquakes and volcanoes,they,along with the US,brave the Pacific Ring of Fire,and letting nothing deter it from being among the most developed countries in the world.It has braved a Tsunami recently,and is once again facing a serious nuclear situation due to the overheating of reactors in Fukushima,an aftermath of the recent dreaded Tsunami and earthquake.But nothing deters them.They move on and rebuild.

    The US tendency to play Big brother a host of nations, while resented,is actually obliged by economically weaker nations. Perhaps money does rule after all.But that's not it.The US makes native goodness look cool.It is the perfect Global ambassador. From Sushi(Japanese cuisine) to Yoga(Very very Indian),everything becomes cool once it is Americanized.Hell,even Swami Vivekananda was recognized once he went to America!!

    Perhaps that's the lure of this land.You can love them,hate them but just can't ignore them.Probably China is in the fray to topple the US complacence once again.The world will have to wait and watch if the US is atits twilight or rises once again like the proverbial phoenix.

    Or perhaps,like Japan, will all of them just realize that, all this one-up manship falls flat in the face of something above them all,Nature's fury unleashed?For then,man is truly humbled,and has to bow until nature has had her say.And start again....all over again.